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| | Subject: Re: Cleaning Application Tue Oct 05, 2010 11:58 am | |
| Your pages are good (the redrawing was awesome indeed). However, the first two pages that you cleaned were Precleans, and not pure RAWs. As a cleaner, you will be the one to hand out cleans or precleans, not the one that will be handed the cleans or precleans xD Here, try this. These are the kind of pages you will have to face as a cleaner  (in fact, these are the BEST pages you can expect to face xP Sometime, you will have to clean very crappy pages, so you have to be prepared ) http://www.mediafire.com/?o4jh5wdbackphfaAnd if you want to try out some TSing, here is the script for that chappie ^^ - Trans by Transfade:
Name Mutter: - Means a person says something outside a bubble
SFX: - Sound Effect
Name: Apple Banana(STYLE) Cucumber – Means a particular word has to be done in a specific style
Name(STYLE): - Means the entire sentence is done in the mentioned style.
(Random) – Means a comment only meant for working purposes.
(TN:) – Means this comment is meant to be included in the typesetted version.
Page 1
Text: Ageha has finally reached Miroku!!
Miroku: You are...
Page 2
Miroku: There are billions of stars in space
Miroku: For us to meet once more on one of them is fate at work again...
Miroku: ...and so, we meet again, boy.
Page 3
Text: Beneath the great shining tree, the battle begins at once!!
Text: The novel has sold out at the shops so a second edition has been decided on!!
Title: CALL.136 "Siblings"
Amamiya: What a tremendous life force...
Amamiya: So this is Amagi Miroku's power...
Page 4
Ageha: Since that time at Inui's mountain villa huh.
Ageha: It's been a while, Amagi Miroku.
Miroku: ...you still appear the same as you did then.
Miroku: Those eyes too... You even reek of the old era's stench.
Miroku: I see... I see now. You all...
Miroku(EMPHASIS): Time...!!
Ageha: I have finally
Ageha: caught up to you...!
Page 5
Q: Yes
Q: Finally
Q: We are finally here
Q: You brought us here
Page 6
Q: You have my gratitude.
Q: Yoshina Ageha. Amamiya Sakurako.
Miroku(BOLD): Sister...!!
Q: I should have said so at the time. You are no longer my little brother.
Page 7
Miroku: ...I see. So you want to stop me no matter what then.
Miroku: I really should have killed you then. Before you stabbed me in the back once more...
Q: ...you haven't changed at all.
Q: If you continue on and commit this mistake then everything shall follow it into destruction.
Miroku(BOLD): Destruction!? No, it will all begin once again!
Miroku(BOLD): This world shall be resurrected by my hands!!
Miroku(BOLD): I have the power to do that! You had it as well!
Miroku(BOLD): In spite of that, you rejected the very idea of changing the world!
Miroku(BOLD): You betrayed me at that time in Grigori!
Page 8
Q: I... am not going.
Q: I will not follow you.
Q: ...Are you disobeying me sister?
Miroku: Why do you not choose me over Grigori...?
Q: ...You have changed.
Q: I will play no part in the acts that you shall undertake from now on.
Miroku: So you're staying here then...!?
Miroku: Are you going to abandon your little brother...!?
Q: A complete monster.
Q: That is not something I wish to become.
Miroku: ... Is that so...
Page 10
Miroku: What...!!
Amamiya: Yoshina...!
Page 11
Ageha: You bastard...!!
Page 12
Q: ...Yoshina. The me right now is just an illusion I've created using the card as an intermediary. It has no substance so it would have been fine even if that gone through.
Ageha: Ah... My bad.
Q: But still... Thank you.
Q: ...before all this, that man and I
Q: Should have helped each other out like this.
Ageha(BOLD): ...No. 7.
Ageha(BOLD): I will stop him.
Ageha(BOLD): We are not people of this era. But even so
Page 13
Ageha(BOLD): I will fight to save this era.
Q: ...understood.
Page 14
Miroku: An astral body... Compared to the last time we met, it certainly does seem like you are a different person.
Miroku: Crossing through time itself... Sister has been searching for her last hope at stopping me ...And that would be you?
Miroku: You are quite the despicable one. At some point, you had taken up the fetters that I had cast aside... Just why is that...
Miroku: If I kill you... perhaps then sister might return back to my side...?
Page 15
Ageha: Fetters...!!?
Ageha: Fetters you say...!!
Ageha: Fine she said... You were trying to kill her...!!
Ageha: And you call me "despicable"...!!?
AGeha: You snatched away the lives of how many billions of people...!!
Ageha: And I'm... the "Despicable" one...!?
Ageha: What the fuck are you saying...!!
Page 16
Ageha(BOLD&ANGRY FONT): WHAT THE FUCK DID YOU JUST SAY!!!
Page 17
AMamiya: A Black Nova...!!
Amamiya: This is...
Amamiya: Your hatred
Amamiya: And anger
Amamiya: Melchsee's...!!
TN: The kanji for Melchsee's is read as the Raging King.
Page 19
Text: His fury towards Miroku... It has dyed him in the pitch Black darkness of the "Raging King"!!
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| | Subject: Re: Cleaning Application Wed Oct 06, 2010 8:55 pm | |
| Very nice especially the first two. I 'm not as good a critiquing as kiba but i can tell you that the third page still has some dust in the grays. Which i know can be difficult to get rid of so not entirely your fault but like I said kiba will be along to tell you how two fix that problem. |
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| | Subject: Re: Cleaning Application Wed Oct 06, 2010 9:32 pm | |
| Yeah, those areas seemed to be a lot lighter than the grays around them after I denoised and leveled, so I started over and burned them a bit before denoising and it just seemed to make it dusty. I also forgot to redraw the lightning in the corner next to "Your hatred..." haha, oops. |
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| | Subject: Re: Cleaning Application Thu Oct 07, 2010 10:56 am | |
| Lets see: The cleans in the first and second page are very good! Very impressive for a fist try (or maybe not the first xP). However, the third pages has some ugly greys in the upper part >.> It also looks a bit overleveled (or maybe overburned?). If I had to clean a page like that (well, I did clean it some time ago xP but I meant if I had to clean it with just a denoiser) I would have used higher noise reduction values and less recover details ones. Anyway, it was still good ^^ As for the TSing, the diamond shape is correct, but you must center your bubbles carefully Also, the fonts you chose were also appropiate. You still need some more training until you can make a release on your own, but the rest of your training can be archieved in our Staff subforums. Congratz, you are in |
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| | Subject: Re: Cleaning Application Thu Oct 07, 2010 12:46 pm | |
|  good job |
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