HeiDenReX Cleaner
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Fri Nov 12, 2010 10:52 am | |
| yay he's pink'ed again.! alright now things were clearer. :DD
*has been confused all this time* |
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B-one Lucky Ducky
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Fri Nov 12, 2010 9:27 pm | |
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Helios666 Where am I?
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Fri Nov 12, 2010 10:44 pm | |
| ohhhh... now i get it.. thanks masters |
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Helios666 Where am I?
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Fri Nov 12, 2010 11:05 pm | |
| I hope i did it correctly. Correct me if I did it wrong guys. Thanks - Spoiler:
Blazer Drive
25th BLAZE "hellfire"
Pg. 1
Incineration to all oppositions!!!
Pg. 2
Makiura - ...How could you've done this to me...?
I had even saved your life...Why...?
Sumiya - Saved my life?
What? Didn't you teach me this yourself?
Pg. 3
Loaner – Your wife’s hospital fee and surgery must've cost you a lot, huh?
Makino - Tch, nothing's left but worthless trash.
Loaner - We didn't want to do this to you, Sumiya-san,
But you failed to meet the deadline of your payment...
Makino - Oh!
Found something good now~
Pg. 4
Great, a branded...watch for women.
Sumiya - No!! That's my mom's watch.
Don't take my mom's treasured watch!!!
Makino - ...'da hell?
Sumiya - Dad, but that's mom's memento.
Get it back, dad!!
DAD!!!
Pg. 5
Dad...
Dammit!!
Makino - Whoa, now! 'tis your own fault guys, OK?
Sumiya - Ugh.
Makino - For borrowing our money, but didn't return it...
It's all because of your dad.
We don't care if 'tis your mom's memento or what.
All we care is whether we can change it to money.
Get it?...This is...
Pg. 6
what they call business.
But guess you're still too young to understand it. Haha.
Loaner – That’s it, Makino. We're taking that kid with us.
Pg. 7
Well then, we'll be taking your kid as said in our “contract”.
That’s what we’re here for from the very beginning.
Sumiya - [Contract!?]
Loaner - Kids around this age are getting popular recently, as well.
The supply just couldn't satisfy all the demands.
Makino - Hey, kid. Betcha wanna live in a big house with lots of spaces,
more than this small, empty room, eh?
Bye, then. We'll take good care of 'im.
Sumiya - What're you doing? Stop!!
Help me, dad!!
Help me!!
Pg. 8
Makino - Huh?
Sumiya's dad - Please wait!!!
I'll give you anything, but please, don't take away my son!!
Loaner - Alright.
Then, after you get your life insurance,
we're going to have you dead.
Give us your insurance payout.
Should be an easy deal if it’s for your son, am I right?
Dad!!!
Pg. 9
Pg. 10
-- The politician, Chief Misawa's house --
Misawa - Welcome.
I've always wanted to talk to you
regarding the future of our country.
You must've felt some delicacy about working hard for this country, I presume.
Pg. 11
If you want to blame anyone, then blame your dad and your own fate.
This is business. This is what makes the world go round.
Pg. 12
Sumiya - Number 13, entering.
I highly thank you for choosing me.
Anything as you ordered,
my lord...
Makiura - "Lord", hm...
Warder Misawa
must've disciplined you really well, huh...
Sumiya.
Sumiya – [How did he know my name?]
Makiura - Well, I'll ask you for one favor...
That is
Pg. 13
Kill your warder,
Misawa.
Sumiya - Eh!?
Makiura - You're the chosen one. I know you can do it.
This Enku will unleash the flame smothering deep inside your heart.
That person is best gone.
Why do you hesitate?
You should've known this, shouldn't you?
Pg. 14
I would like you to kill him.
I want to free you.
This is what I call a business.
Pg. 15
Sumiya - Like back then...
Pg. 16
this is what I call a business.
I already have my next dealing partner, now. That's why.
Pg. 17
-- Section III Guardian, inside the division --
Daichi - Seriously!? Then, you called all of us here today
because we’ve located the Quilin Realm's base?
Melon - That's right. Everyone will break up into teams,
and strike each and every one of their HQ and subdivisions.
Misora - It's easier to locate them than I thought.
Melon - You're all thrilled now, aren't you?
Guardian - Ye-Yes, ma'am.
Pg. 18
Daichi - [I really can feel the thrill.]
[We might finally be able to save Ginga.]
Alright, let's sneak into their HQ, now!!
Yuyuka - I want to go to the HQ, as well.
I'll be in the same team as you.
Kuroki - Ah, Daichi.
You'll be heading for their subdivision.
Yuyuka - Ah...Guess I’ll be going to the subdivision too
Daichi – What the fuck, Kuroki!?
But Ginga is probably somewhere in their HQ!!
Pg. 19
Kuroki - The one they're after is you.
We can't let you wander off, won’t we?
So said the head~
[Where did that come from?]
Dog - Warf.
Daichi - When I was young, I saved the little Shiro from bullies.
Ginga praised me, saying that that's excellent.
Ginga risked his life to protect me, and saved me.
I know that he must've wanted someone to praise him, as well.
With my very own hands,
I'll certainly
Pg. 20
rescue him myself,
and won't let anyone complain about it.
Pg. 21
Melon - Fuh...
as you wish then.
But I'll whip you if you let them catch you.
I dare say this will be...
our last battle with the Quilin Realm.
Pg. 22-23
That goes for all of you, too. I'll kill you if you ever drop dead, so be prepared for it.
Guardian - Guess we can't die in this, then.
We'll avenge your old base.
Daichi - Alright!
Pg. 24
Sumiya - There you are.
But how did you unlock the pod...?
Pg. 25
Your memory...also have Daichi-kun in it with you.
Both of you are in the same age as you are now...
But I thought you two merely just met in your recent battle...
This shouldn't have even been possible.
And...that picture book...!?
[Kaine, who exactly are you...?]
Pg. 26
Kaine - Ah.
Ah.
Ah.
Sumiya - The effect of putting on 2 Quilin Mystickers simultaneously just took place?
Kaine - Ah.
Ah.
Sumiya - I guess your memory is reverted back too far now.
Pg. 27
Kaine...Your favorite toy
should be here soon.
If you don't quickly try out the third Quilin,
that toy will hate you, alright?
Kaine - Kya,
kya.
Pg. 28
Quilin Realm - How did you know to find our base?
Who are you guys!?
Guardian - We're from Section II Guardian Division,
the division that you just crushed.
Pg. 29
Quilin Realm - Don't you intervene while I'm enjoying my music!
If so,
then I'll avenge Shuga-sama, now.
Vent CDK
Guardian - Resist Mysticker,
Repel.
Pg. 30
Quilin Realm - He bounced them back?
Pg. 31
Damn, they just keep on coming.
Guardian - I'm not done yet.
Pg. 32
Repel.
Quilin Realm - Ngh.
That Mysticker can rebound anything?
Won't be good if I fight with all three of them.
I better use this repulsion force to dive into the sea and hide down there.
Pg. 33
I have an Oxygen Mysticker with me, too.
Farewell.
Guardian - Yeah.
Quilin Realm - GYA.
Guardian - Farewell.
Pg. 34
Nice one, Knob.
You too, Kagekyu.
OWWWWWW!!
[You seriously are just Kagekyu.]
Lo...Looks like this...is as far...as I can go...
Daichi...take care of the Quilin Realm...HQ for me...
Pg. 35
Daichi - [Dammit. We couldn't even see where the enemy is]
[or even fight back at all...]
[Where exactly is he!!?]
Pg. 36
Quilin Realm - I can clear~ly see all of you,
from 1 km away, that is~
My Cyclops is both Supporting Type and Weapon Type. It's the Mysticker which integrates the eyes with the rifle.
You can't run away from me~
Let's not shoot at the heart and the head~
Pg. 37
Alright, one do-...
He's still standing!?
What the? Did I miss!!?
He's pointing this way!!?
Could they possibly...!!?
Pg. 38
Tenjik - Yeah, already know where you are.
Quilin Realm - What's this rat!!? When did it get here?
Tenjik - You're surprised at THAT?
Shouldn't you be more surprised that I'm talking!!?
We have all the info about you.
We already took picture of Daichi getting shot long before this.
[This is my communicator.]
All I need is to hold it in front of the scope.
Quilin Realm - Damn, so that's what it is!!?
Tenjik - You can see miles away, but can't see what's in front of you, huh?
Quilin Realm - Then you too are a Guardian!?
How did you know where I am!?
Pg. 39
My nose is peculiar, after all.
I can distinguish the unique smell emitted from activated Mystickers,
in 800 m distance, for the time being.
Quilin Realm - [I never knew that the Guardian also have this kind of rat!!]
[I didn't even notice his presence!!]
Tenjik - But I bet you'll be more surprised
to know that I'm a Blazer, too.
Quilin Realm - What!!!?
Tenjik - BLAST PLUS!!!
Pg. 40-41
??? - Who would've thought that the Quilin Realm's HQ is inside a dam?
Yuyuka - YAHOO
Pg. 42
Echo - YAHOO~~~
Kuroki - It's really huge.
Yuyuka - Wow. The sound got echoed as well!!
Tenjik - We did not come here to play around.
How disgraceful of you, Yuyuka-sama.
Misora - I was thinking of trying that too, though...
Yuyuka - What's wrong with that?
YAHOO~~
Pg. 43
Sumiya - Yahoo~
Pg. 44
It's rude to come in without any appointment, but I'll let that slide this time.
Let's talk about our business for now, shall we?
I'll be waiting upstairs...
Daichi-kun.
Pg. 45
Daichi - No need for the wait.
This is our last battle. Let's settle it quick.
** The time for their decisive battle has come!! **
just edited it and did what senior ppere said. hope I did it correctly... well I'm off then.. be back soon
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Kiba Administrator
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Mon Nov 15, 2010 10:39 am | |
| Meg come to the rescue! |
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Helios666 Where am I?
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Tue Nov 16, 2010 4:45 am | |
| hmmmm... Maybe I should stick to supporting you guys for the meantime... Be back soon... Going out for a bit without them knowing... hope I did correct the script correctly....
POWER TO YOU GUYS! |
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Millos Assailant Translator
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| Subject: Re: Trying To apply for proof reading ^_^ Wed Nov 17, 2010 10:17 am | |
| Thanks Helios. I'll let Meg know so she can review. =) |
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